Jenny: Mare 2
Which made me realize that although I do need Crash's viewpoint, I need it in his VIEWPOINT, that is, it's not just that it has to be in his head and his voice, it has to be his story. Which means I have to know what his story is. I know the end of it, but I have to figure out how to introduce it, and I think that has to be in a scene that follows the diner scene, not the diner scene itself.
Which means I just blew an hour messing with a perfectly good scene, but at least we've learned something from this, Dorothy.